The day I lost my horse

It all started when I in the stable is getting some hay for my horse Becky.And man behind me crept over to Becky’s stable and unlocked the gate to Becky’s stable and then the man ran off and I didn’t notice then I look behind me when I was just about to give Becky her food then she was gone I called out for her but I got no answer so want to go look for her(10 minutes later) wondering in the woods hopping that I would find Becky then all of a sudden something coming from behind I turned around and I sore Becky standing right in front of me my eyes lit up like the moon I was so happy that I had found Becky so we went back to the stable.

3 thoughts on “The day I lost my horse”

  1. Great work ,I really like the phrase my eyes lit up like moon .You could improve by using full stops.

  2. Great work ,I really like the phrase”my eyes lit up like moon” .You could improve by using full stops.

  3. Good story line but just look before you post it because there were sentences that didn’t make sense.

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