Stick Thingy

Once upon a time, when I was walking in the park, I saw some large logs, lying on the ground. Then I looked away. I looked back and they had moved! I was wandering what was going on. So I decided to go back home.

The next day, I went back to the park they had moved again! Suddenly, the logs got up. They started doing forward lunges. It was an amazing sight. Loads of stick people walking. I didn’t know what to do? I thought I should go back home again.

When I got back home, I went to bed. I woke back up in the morning and realised it was just a dream.

2 thoughts on “Stick Thingy”

  1. Dear James,

    I like how well you used capitalization and punctutation in the story. I also liked how you ended it with a cliff hanger. I would suggest making less paragraphs, as it can be confusing if there are too many. Overall, your story was great!

  2. Hi James!
    Great job on creating a story. When you used the word “wandering”, I think it should have been the word wondering. Also, I noticed one sentence that didn’t make much sense to me, so you may want to double check that. I really like how your logs were dancing, and you did a really great job constructing a creative story that kept the reader interested.
    -Maya E.

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