The catastrophic cage

One fine day, Ross and Finn, who were two adventurous twins got up to an early start. An early start because they were going to the zoo. It wasn’t any old zoo though, it was the brand new zoo in Royston.  They got ready, shot out out of the door and went straight into the car. The two boys were very over exited for their day out at the zoo. Their mum soon came in after them. After around three hours, they got to  the zoo. Ross and Finn looked around the boring dull carpark, they could see mysterious things around them. But when they looked to the left they just ran and screamed ” THE TIGER IS BLOCKING THE ENTRANCE!” They ran for their life. And don’t get me started on what happened to the car.

3 thoughts on “The catastrophic cage”

  1. Hi Francesca! I really enjoyed reading your story. I think you did a great job with your details describing how the day will be. Also, I liked how you made the story have a cliff hanger. Great Job!

  2. Hi,
    I love your piece it is very good. Something specific I like about it is that it paints a picture in my mind. A fact and a connection that I can tell you is that I also wrote about this. Something you could improve on is that you should work on your ending a little bit. Again I love your piece and keep up the good work.
    Happy Writing from, Aubrey in Illinois!

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