The Gold Group

Once upon a mine there lived a little group of gold diggers and they were always digging for gold. But they never found any so they kept on digging and digging until the boss said ”I don’t want to be in charge” so the other one said”But what if I was in charge cause I really want to be in charge” and then the boss said ”ahh ok”. So now the other boss was in charge and it was all good until the mountain they were living in fell down and they were all gone and never seen again.

THE END

 

4 thoughts on “The Gold Group”

  1. Lennon,

    That post was awesome! I really liked your play on words “Once upon a mine.” Also I really liked how you set up the other guy asking to be in charge.

  2. Oh dear, Lennon. What a tragedy! I agree with Tyler that you have played with words in this – it reads like a modern version of an old traditional tale, with a very sad ending.
    Your spelling is super and your idea was great – take a look at the rules for punctuating speech to make it even better.
    I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for entering this week’s 100 word challenge.

  3. Hey Lennon!
    This was a very creative, unique story with a clever beginning I didn’t even notice at first. I liked the ending you chose, but maybe you should stay away from “the end” next time. Check your punctuation, too.
    Sincerely, Zara in Illinois.
    P.S. My class didn’t do this week, but read my story for week 21 when you can!

  4. I thought that your post was great! I like how you included vivid words such as the little group and the mountain so I can get a clear image in my head. Great job!

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