The Mad Monkey

One upon a time there was a monkey, but not just any old monkey, but an………………………………………………..     angry monkey. (Sorry if you were expecting something more exciting but hard luck). Anyway so there was a angry monkey now this monkey was very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very, very angry. This was because it had just seen a programme where a man had hurt a wild monkey,  he was furious! He pulled back a computer and pushed it on to the floor, it hit the ground with a THUD and a CRASH! now he had been adopted so that is how he got the computer. OK.

THE END

3 thoughts on “The Mad Monkey”

  1. Hello Adam I really like how you put the brackets, it really made me laugh. I always look forward to reading your posts. Well done.

    From Francesca

  2. Hi Adam! I really liked how you exaggerated to the point that this monkey was very very angry. You also did a good job on using onomatopoeia to make the sounds of the computer falling on the ground. Good job!

  3. Dear Adam,
    I liked reading your story about the mad monkey. In the beginning, I liked what you did with the long line of eclipses to create suspense. Also, I like how you added in some repitition. You even put in some onomatopoeia which is figurative language! It makes me want to keep reading and makes the story so much better. One more thing that I enjoyed in your story is the very ending. Sometimes in your blogs at the end, you put in “the end” in all capital letters. It makes the story look better. Anyway, your writing is always awesome! Great Job!

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