The Mysterious City

St Noels: that was the name of the city. One fine morning a man was walking down a street. Now no person had ever walked down this street because it had just opened. He was just minding his own business when his vision suddenly blurred and was then transported to what looked like another world. He was scared in fact really scared but no in fact he was really really scared so scared that he fainted!!!!! But when he fainted he went back to his old world where it is definatly not creepy nope not creepy or is it… AAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

3 thoughts on “The Mysterious City”

  1. Dear Adam,
    I really like how you ended your story with foreshadowing. This will make the reader hungry for more of your story. Great Job!
    From, Eesha

  2. Good job on your post. I really liked your ending. It makes me want to keep reading on what happened. Also, you used some adjectives that makes me picture what is happening.

  3. Hi Adam! This week you had a very nice story. I liked how you never said that there were actually ghosts. That was a pretty cool feature of your story. Nice job!

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