The parcels

One day there was a girl called Amelie and she was old enough to live by herself so she did.Amelie went for a walk.She ordered loads of things on the internet and they said it would arrive tonight.When Amelie got home she saw her packages and said “when did it arrive?”.So next time she goes on a walk she has to be quick!.

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  1. Hello Amelia,

    Your story is succinct and clear, which are good qualities, although I would have loved to see a bit more of your writing! It would have been interesting to let the reader know a bit more about Amelie (beautiful name) and about the things she was buying. The ending is snappy and has something of the limerick about it, which is fitting for such a short story. Well done.

    All the best,
    Elise (Team 100) – Coventry 🙂

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