Theft

One day a man named Jack was going to the next house to find more things to… STEAL! He hopped through one of the open windows and plopped onto the carpet with a *THUMP*! Luckily for him there was no one in the house. He looked through all the drawers and he found diamonds! He thought in his mind “but where would we hide it all?” He said ‘we’ because in his back pocket was a tiny rat! He heard footsteps running up the staircase so he backed away onto the windowsill, he tumbled and slipped, then eventually he fell…

4 thoughts on “Theft”

  1. Hi Chloe! Great job on your blog. I liked how ended on a cliffhanger to make the reader think of what can happen when he falls. I can think of A LOT of things. In the future though, I would suggest putting “But where should we hide it all?”He thought instead of what you put. You could save a few words by doing this. Other than that, Fantabulous ?

  2. Dear Chloe,

    I liked the part when you said “then eventually he fell…” This made me wonder “Where did he fall?” I also liked it when the thief had a little rodent buddy. It makes the story a bit funnier. I loved your story! Keep up the good work!

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